Could I have that one sentence back?
A few days ago I noted, in response to a challenge from anonymous, that press coverage would be greatly improved by removing adjectives, as an easy method to remove judgment from news stories.
Here's a great example of how removing a sentence would have made a piece better, but keeping it has made the story a laughingstock:
The WaPo continues to amuse as they explain Wilson's motivation:
The Niger claim was central to the White House's rationale for war.
So central that it was not part of either the 2003 State of the Union or Colin Powell's presentation to the UN on the case for war.
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